Sunday, 16 September 2012

Application Letter Critique

Internship Ad:

IT Development Intern
Contact ABN AMRO HR to apply for position
Company Name: ABN AMRO Bank N.V.
Location: One Raffles Quay South Tower
Posted Date: 17 Aug 2012
Estimated Period: Immediate, 3 - 6 mths
Estimated salary monthly (pro-rated): S$ 1,200.00
ABN AMRO has a strong heritage and long-standing presence of over 180 years in Asia. ABN AMRO is the oldest foreign bank in Singapore, offering our clients Private Banking, Commercial and Merchant Banking services. Our ambition is to be the best bank for our clients in our chosen markets.

===== Job Scope =====

We are looking for an intern who is energetic, creative, pro-active with the right web site design experience to support our IT applications team in IT development and projects.

===== Job Requirements =====

Students from NUS and NTU School of Computing and Computer Science is preferred

The programming skill sets required are :

1. C# programming

2. Ajax

3. MS SQL

4. Dot Net

We are looking for an intern who is keen to learn but at the same time able to work independently with a drive to achieve results.


Application Letter:

 Vignesh Lakshmi Rajakumar
25, Prince George's Park;
Singapore 11824


September 10, 2012


The Human Resources manager
One Raffles quay south tower,
Singapore


Dear Sir/Madam:

I hope you would take into consideration my application for the IT development internship open in your firm. I came across your advertisement on www.InternSg.com. I have attached my resume herewith.

I would cherish the opportunity of interning at a well-established firm such as yours. It would also be my honour to work for the oldest foreign bank in Singapore. Programming has always been my dearest passion. So much so that I do not mind working at a stretch for abnormally long hours. I always feel incomplete if I do not finish my coding projects as soon as I can; in one go, if possible. Of late, my experience in web design over the years has tapped the creative side of me. 

Also, I have always felt that I work rather well in teams. That being said, I still think the best part of my applications and designs were those I worked on by myself. I would never bog my team-mates down in the event of a team based scenario.

Given this, I think it would be safe to say that your requirements and my qualities are on the same page and hiring me will not be something that you will regret. It will be on the contrary, rather! I am eagerly looking forward to working with you.

If you would like to contact me for an interview or even a chat, please call me at 6585423476. Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,

Vignesh

Computer engineering year 2
Email: vigneshr.93@gmail.com

Enclosures: Resume

5 comments:

  1. Hey Vignesh,

    May be you could include the team or individual projects that you have done so far in various programming languages. It would be better if you could highlight your experience in a particular programming language. As the internship advertisement says programming skill sets required, it would be an added advantage if you could mention your expertise in those skills.

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    1. Sudarsan,

      Thank you for commenting!
      I understand what you mean when you are telling me to put my programming expertise here. However, I felt that the part would be best suited in the resume. Remember how I had told you in the peer teaching to be a bit mysterious in your cover letter so the person reading it has an urge to take up your application and read it? That is what i tried to do here :P

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  2. Hey Vignesh! I really like your application letter. It was concise and you did not go overboard when you spoke of your achievements. Just a simple rearrangement of words,I would say 'Rather, it will be on the contrary!' instead of 'it will be on the contrary, rather!'. Hope it helps!

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  3. Hi Vignesh!

    Your application letter is razor-like in its precision. However, as stated in the advert, you could have, perhaps taken a project that you are proud of and explained about it in a bit more detail. However, I personally think that you should perhaps be a bit more formal, as you are applying to a prestigious bank!

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    1. Hari,

      I too was contemplating whether to go formal or personnel. I guess it is, to an extent, a personal choice. One person might feel that He\She would have a better chance if he wrote a crisp, formal letter. On the other hand, some others, like me, would feel that a more personal letter stands a better chance.
      Given that, I still think it is upto you.

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